I'd love to hear comments on my portfolio at:
http://www.uc.edu/propractice/ind_design/Abend_Alicia_10.pdf
Here are some concerns I have, but feel free to comment on anything...
-Does my graphic add personality, or is it just distracting?
-Does the font add to or take away from the portfolio?
-How can I make the soccer bag project better?
-Should I keep the jewelry design project in my portfolio or not?
Thanks for your help!
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Hey Alicia,
ReplyDeleteI am just sitting here eating some soup, and so I thought I would take another look at your portfolio... (I know I could just walk across the hall and tell you these things, but it is way more novel to post a comment to your blog)
I really like the graphic part of your portfolio, but I think it is important to make sure the rest of your page balances it out. For example, on your resume page there is lots of color on the graphic border but almost none in the copy. That makes the graphic more interesting than the content, and you don't want that. Perhaps you could make part of your graphic element gray, or add some color to your text.
Also, your postage-stamp little thingys that say the location and duration of your projects are great, but currently a little hard to see. I'm not sure how important they are to you, but you may want to make them bigger to make it more obvious that they serve a purpose.
Let me know if you are interested in more feedback from me...you know where to find me ha
hm.. i like the graphic element, but i think that maybe the body font is a little distracting... it doesn't really compliment the header text.
ReplyDeletei think the bag project sketches need a little something, it seems like there isnt enough line weight. i think the same goes for the final rendering- needs a bit more contrast.
there is a lot of info in your portfolio, you could probably simplify it a bit. i think using a grid could help organize the information a little better, right now its a little overwhelming and i don't know where to look.
as for the jewelry project, i think you could keep it in, but the glamour shot is a little fuzzy.
all in all, i think that your portfolio is really strong process-wise; flipping though it it is clear that you did some solid research.
well... back to my own portfolio!
Hey Alicia,
ReplyDeleteI really like the stamp detail on your portfolio, but like Carly 1 said, it is really hard to read. Actually, I didn't even know about the information on the stamp until I read her comment. The lines and stamp don't really match, so it's best to stick to just one element and everything will be tied together better.
As for your bag, the biggest thing you need is detail. There are no stitch-lines. I see the form of the bag, but how did it become that form?---aka we need to see how the fabrics are sewn together,overlapping to make that shape. Also, small things like putting a zipper on the bag (unless it's open??), can tighten up your design. Check these out for some inspiration: http://www.coroflot.com/public/individual_file.asp?individual_id=160218&portfolio_id=553750&keywords=bag&area_id_4=4&c=1& , http://www.coroflot.com/public/individual_file.asp?individual_id=18515&portfolio_id=1235118&keywords=bag&area_id_4=4&c=1& , I bet Kandel has some sweet advice for bags.. you should hit him up.
Other than that.. sweetness. Rock it out. ;]
Thanks for posting your work! Overall you should know this is nice, you just need to address some details to make it even better.
ReplyDelete1. Your graphic is nice. It's not overpowering and it matches some of the ways you've addressed the images (polaroid and paperclip) , so it is integrated as well.
Specifically, I think the "stamp" elements that Carly refers to are a good size because they fit correctly within the visual hierarchy (I can check them out if I want to, but they're not jumping at me). On the other hand, I think the titles are a bit large. For example of page 5, I already know that your project is an airpurifier, so the text "Segmentation Validation" should come higher in the hierarchy because that's important info. Make the page titles a bit larger and the project title a bit smaller and you're set.
2. The typeface is good, but the kerning (letter spacing) is distracting. Notice how the letters are noticeably uneven from letter to letter. This makes it hard to read. You can fix this yourself, or easily substitute it with Helvetica or something similar.
3. I think the best place to improve the soccer bag project is in the final rendering. Add some stitching and other details to make it look more like a soft good and more realistic.
4. The jewelry project's presence is up to you. I would say it depends on the type of work you want to get. It looks interesting to me, and since you did at co-op that's a bonus. I try to stretch it to two pages instead of just one so you can show everything bigger, especially the ring's details.
Hope this helps - post again if you have an update or another question!
Hey Alicia,
ReplyDeleteOne comment I would have is that your rendering of the ring is so pretty, perhaps you can make that one bigger and show it off, then if you make the picture of the actual ring smaller it will probably look a bit sharper. Also I noticed you forgot the R in "bright" in Sharda's description. I hope I have a chance to tell you soon enough to fix it.
...I like the stamps. :)